Black Hammer
By AJ O’Brien.
And she stood silent
within a crowd of blue,
until the voices
were dark and distant
and she knew what to do.
And she came upon
a fat and empty clown,
with a gun in his hand
whispering songs of neon,
ready to paint the town.
And she turned to flee
as the black hammer fell,
hearing only
the distant ringing
of her death knell.
And she lay dying
beneath the grin of a clown,
as the black hammer fell
again and again,
until her mind shut down.
And she lay silent
within a coffin blue,
as a fat and empty clown
whispers songs of neon,
not knowing what else to do.
Incarcerated shadows 
A brilliant personification of our dark side. I really like the structure of this.
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You’re very kind. Thank you.
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You’re welcome.
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always great to hear from you and keep writing great stuff, blessings
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Thank you kind Sir.
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Wow. Love this – I’m sharing on my Facebook page if that’s ok.
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It most certainly is.
I’m gob smacked.
Thank you very much Nathalie.
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It’s gone on Twitter as well, such a beautiful write – it had to be shared!
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Many Thanks Nathalie.
How did it go down?
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Nobody commented on it but it got some ‘likes’ 😉
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😀
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Very nice. Very, very…
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Thank you.
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Thank you for the poem; it was great
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Thank you very much.
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I got the shivers reading your frightening and beautiful poem, Alan. The colors created a world of terror that pounded and hypnotized me. Such a dazzling array of both neon and black hues! 🖤💚💙💛❤️
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Thank you so much Rose, for another wonderful
and inspiring comment. Your words are always so
meaningful and so appreciated. ❤️💕❤️
Are you not posting anything under Poet rummager?
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My pleasure, Alan. I love your work. Yes, I’ve finally tamed some of the chaos. ❤️💝💋
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oh wow. I see what you mean!!
i normally like to look at the early posts when i first visit a blog, so i guess i had skimmed past this, got distracted and didnt get a chance to come back.
wow. this is so vivid! haha i’m glad i got rid of my creepy guy, sitting in a forgotten corner. although, someone else pointed out, he looked so tragic, you almost feel sympathy at first, but that’s how they can fool you/draw you in… (cue sinister music)
Thanks for visiting! 🌸
Vanessa
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Many Thanks for your wonderful comments.
Much appreciated.
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my pleasure!
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well done!
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Thank you so much.
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Thank you very much.
Unfortunately, I don’t except awards
on my site. But many Thanks for nominating me. 😊
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Songs of neon sound nightmarish like the zapping of light that pierces pain into ones skull. Clowns know that song only too well.
Fabulous work, Alan. I do love your morbid music, you monstrous maestro.
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Thank you so much dead guy.
Your comments are much appreciated. 💀💀💀
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That is well written. You created quite a picture. I’m putting up post tonight on my other blog and will repost it to the one you sent to. I write poetry and this next one also dark. The post will explain why I wrote it – and thanks for finding me. I’ll be back.
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Thank very much.
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Eerie, Alan. This sent chills down my spine.
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Thank you so much Anna.
My work here is done.
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Once again, you’ve created a powerful piece of work! Is the clown an addiction? Or just whatever evil causes this kind of death?
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Thank you very much Ann.
Yes, he is evil incarnate.
A living nightmare.
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That’s what I thought, but sometimes I tend to take things a bit too literally! Thanks for taking the time to explain.
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You’re very welcome Ann.
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This one is so mysterious and punchy! 😍💚Great Job Alan!
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Thank you so much Luiza.
Much appreciated.
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